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A Diagnosis of Death

'I am not so superstitious as some of your physicians - men of science, as you are pleased to be called,' said Hawver, replying to an accusation that had not been made. 'Some of you - only a few, I confess - believe in the immortality of the soul, and in apparitions which you have not the honesty to call ghosts. I go no further than a conviction that the living are sometimes seen where they are not, but have been - where they have lived so long, perhaps so intensely, as to have left their impress on everything about them. I know, indeed, that one's environment may be so affected by one's personality as to yield, long afterward, an image of one's self to the eyes of another. Doubtless the impressing personality has to be the right kind of personality as the perceiving eyes have to be the right kind of eyes - mine, for example.'

'Yes, the right kind of eyes, conveying sensations to the wrong kind of brains,' said Dr. Frayley, smiling.

'Thank you; one likes to have an expectation gratified; that is about the reply that I supposed you would have the civility to make.'

'Pardon me. But you say that you know. That is a good deal to say, don't you think? Perhaps you will not mind the trouble of saying how you learned.'

'You will call it an hallucination,' Hawver said, 'but that does not matter.' And he told the story.

'Last summer I went, as you know, to pass the hot weather term in the town of Meridian. The relative at whose house I had intended to stay was ill, so I sought other quarters. After some difficulty I succeeded in renting a vacant dwelling that had been occupied by an eccentric doctor of the name of Mannering, who had gone away years before, no one knew where, not even his agent. He had built the house himself and had lived in it with an old servant for about ten years. His practice, never very extensive, had after a few years been given up entirely. Not only so, but he had withdrawn himself almost altogether from social life and become a recluse. I was told by the village doctor, about the only person with whom he held any relations, that during his retirement he had devoted himself to a single line of study, the result of which he had expounded in a book that did not commend itself to the approval of his professional brethren, who, indeed, considered him not entirely sane. I have not seen the book and cannot now recall the title of it, but I am told that it expounded a rather startling theory. He held that it was possible in the case of many a person in good health to forecast his death with precision, several months in advance of the event. The limit, I think, was eighteen months. There were local tales of his having exerted his powers of prognosis, or perhaps you would say diagnosis; and it was said that in every instance the person whose friends he had warned had died suddenly at the appointed time, and from no assignable cause. All this, however, has nothing to do with what I have to tell; I thought it might amuse a physician.

'The house was furnished, just as he had lived in it. It was a rather gloomy dwelling for one who was neither a recluse nor a student, and I think it gave something of its character to me - perhaps some of its former occupant's character; for always I felt in it a certain melancholy that was not in my natural disposition, nor, I think, due to loneliness. I had no servants that slept in the house, but I have always been, as you know, rather fond of my own society, being much addicted to reading, though little to study. Whatever was the cause, the effect was dejection and a sense of impending evil; this was especially so in Dr. Mannering's study, although that room was the lightest and most airy in the house. The doctor's life-size portrait in oil hung in that room, and seemed completely to dominate it. There was nothing unusual in the picture; the man was evidently rather good looking, about fifty years old, with iron-grey hair, a smooth-shaven face and dark, serious eyes. Something in the picture always drew and held my attention. The man's appearance became familiar to me, and rather "haunted" me.

'One evening I was passing through this room to my bedroom, with a lamp - there is no gas in Meridian. I stopped as usual before the portrait, which seemed in the lamplight to have a new expression, not easily named, but distinctly uncanny. It interested but did not disturb me. I moved the lamp from one side to the other and observed the effects of the altered light. While so engaged I felt an impulse to turn round. As I did so I saw a man moving across the room directly toward me! As soon as he came near enough for the lamplight to illuminate the face I saw that it was Dr. Mannering himself; it was as if the portrait were walking!

'"I beg your pardon," I said, somewhat coldly, "but if you knocked I did not hear."

'He passed me, within an arm's length, lifted his right forefinger, as in warning, and without a word went on out of the room, though I observed his exit no more than I had observed his entrance.

'Of course, I need not tell you that this was what you will call a hallucination and I call an apparition. That room had only two doors, of which one was locked; the other led into a bedroom, from which there was no exit. My feeling on realizing this is not an important part of the incident.

'Doubtless this seems to you a very commonplace "ghost story" - one constructed on the regular lines laid down by the old masters of the art. If that were so I should not have related it, even if it were true. The man was not dead; I met him to-day in Union Street. He passed me in a crowd.'

Hawver had finished his story and both men were silent. Dr. Frayley absently drummed on the table with his fingers.

'Did he say anything to-day?' he asked - 'anything from which you inferred that he was not dead?'

Hawver stared and did not reply.

'Perhaps,' continued Frayley,' he made a sign, a gesture - lifted a finger, as in warning. It's a trick he had - a habit when saying something serious - announcing the result of a diagnosis, for example.'

'Yes, he did - just as his apparition had done. But, good God! did you ever know him?'

Hawver was apparently growing nervous.

'I knew him. I have read his book, as will every physician some day. It is one of the most striking and important of the century's contributions to medical science. Yes, I knew him; I attended him in an illness three years ago. He died.'

Hawver sprang from his chair, manifestly disturbed. He strode forward and back across the room; then approached his friend, and in a voice not altogether steady, said: 'Doctor, have you anything to say to me - as a physician? '

'No, Hawver; you are the healthiest man I ever knew. As a friend I advise you to go to your room. You play the violin like an angel. Play it; play something light and lively. Get this cursed bad business off your mind.'

The next day Hawver was found dead in his room, the violin at his neck, the bow upon the string, his music open before him at Chopin's Funeral March.

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Keeping its size in mind, the story starts slowly and finishes like a whirl-wind. Obviously the authors skills are impressive, refined, but the plot-line was reasonably dull. Maybe it should have been longer, the scenes fleshed out so we could be there, the characters explored so we could pity them, empathize with them or whatever, in order to become scary. But it was definitely worth reading, the writing techniques are stella stuff! Bravo

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Its a wonderful story and I admire the level of originality within it. I am using it as a test on a "How to write short stories" guide which we are studying in English Extension. My only criticismis that perhaps you could have included more techniques or meachanisms as a means of building tension?

This is only an opinion and in no way meant to offend the author. I wish I could write like you at some point.

Regards,
n

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It`s aninteresting story about the inmortality of the soul.If you don´t
believe in ghosts,this tale remaind it.
The protagonist is an eccentric doctor called Mannering,who lived in a house
built by himself.He was reclused for 10
years in this place and he proyected
his life in predicction about the
other dimension .

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This is one of the most terrible stories I have EVER heard. This story has NO meaning what so ever. I apologize for saying this but, I would have no clue how you would be able to undertstand this story. If you gave more detail to this story then I would be able to see where youre coming from, but other than that I have to say myself that I have NO clue what you are talking about. I am terribly sorry for these sayings but I would love to hear the same story but with more details. Thank you, have a nice day.

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I was very disappointed with this story. The rating came just under Poe’s story so I expected it to be worthwhile. It reminds me of a pointless article. It’s far too short, with little-to-no sustenance. If it were pages longer and more descriptive, it would’ve made for an interesting story.

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Ive read the first page – I want to give up, I’m not even slightly grabbed. First line has to be one of the least engaging I have ever read. The writing style seems affected - Bierce seems to be mimicking what he thinks Poe sounds like. The style makes me think of a child trying to pull off ‘sophisticated’ in her mother’s highheels. The dialogue is awkward and clumsy. I understand that the writer is trying to portray the characters as ‘educated gentleman’ but poor grammar and verboseness doesn’t cut it, even if it ‘sounds’ posh. The basic story has promise – but needs fleshing out, more dynamics, characterisation, and subtleties. I can’t shake the impression that this piece was written by a very young author (mid to late teens?) trying to write in a mature style. If that is the case, regardless of the criticisms above, there is definitely a fine talent there to be honed. In all, the story needs a lot of work, but there is hope.

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I liked this story it was a good one but not the best I ever read to many big words and sincetific terms the plot is good but the dilog doesnt really grob the reader i mean the first few sentence in my head was hurting no offense

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This story really grabbed my attention, although it was not one of the most well written short stories I have read. The way the author used flashbacks to tell the story was very interesting. However I do think that the ending was a bit odd in that it did not go into detail about his death. I also thought is would have helped the story by giving more setting discrptions to really pull the reader in.

-Da Smurf

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I thought this story couldve been much better. If the author had gone into more detail about the fear the main character was experiencing, it wouldve been much more interesting. Great authors such as Edgar Allen Poe are great because they do as much as they can to instill the same fear the character feels into the reader. However, as it is unfair to compare this story to the work of Poe, I thought it was decent.

-CB

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I like the story, however I came in to it expecting something different. It wasnt particularly "scary", as what one of the previous comments said, I think that I could have been improved greatly if they had given the character "Hawver" more personality and showed more emotion in the character it would have gotten my attention on a more personal level. i personally like stories best when I can create an emotional connection with the character, and can relate to what he/she is feeling during moments of the story.

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This story does sound like a teen writing this story, it sounds like a dumb camp fire ghost story that everyone falls asleep to….the dialogue was indeed very awkward and clumsy, it was like the author didn’t know what he was writing about? Or just was trying way too hard to scare his readers but failed. the story in general made me wanna hit someone it was honestly a very bad story…like some parts I was like “ooooo” and got all excited but got quickly turned off at the next sentence. Most authors now days can’t seem to understand that you really don’t need to over drive it. Just relax (: calm down. And details details! Make sure your dam dialogue makes sense…and is actually the type of story you put it under in the category’s.

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Great story!

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