Eternity is 20 Seconds Long
Kev adjusted his position in the hammock, just enough to look round.
Beyond the shade cast by the trees, the beach was ablaze with sunlight. The glare from the white sand would have been painful if it hadn't been for his sunglasses. Even with them, the flicking pinpoints of light from the sea stabbed sharply into his retina.
There was still ice in the bucket, though, and the drinks were cold.
Along the beach, he could see the girl coming back towards him. The bright orange bikini glowed against her tanned skin. She waved.
He'd promised her a special experience. She didn't know how special it would be. They would have the time of their lives. A very long time. He waved back.
Everything was perfect. Now was the moment.
The device resting on his chest looked like an irregular collection of cylinders, in several different shades of red to purple. The interface unit attached to the side was a crude human intrusion, but necessary. He picked up his PalmPC, linked in to the interface, brought up the programme.
Took a deep breath and hit go.
The rush of alien symbols across the screen was as expected - but surely that configuration was wrong? Alarmed, Kev reached a finger to the abort icon….
DISCONTINUITY
"That's the loop point."
Kev adjusted his position in the hammock, just enough to look round.
Beyond the shade cast by the trees, the beach was ablaze with sunlight. The glare from the white sand would have been painful if it hadn't been for his sunglasses. Even with them, the flicking pinpoints of light from the sea stabbed sharply into his retina.
"How come he doesn't see us?"
"Different time streams. We weren't there then."
There was still ice in the bucket, though, and the drinks were cold.
Along the beach, he could see the girl coming back towards him. The bright orange bikini glowed against her tanned skin. She waved.
"What about the girl?"
"Outside the field, fortunately. If he'd set it differently, she'd be in there with him."
"How big could it have got?"
"We're not sure. Perhaps the entire planet."
He'd promised her a special experience. She didn't know how special it would be. They would have the time of their lives. A long time. He waved back.
"What was he trying to do?"
"We're not sure. Extend his holiday, perhaps."
Everything was perfect. Now was the moment.
The device resting on his chest looked like an irregular collection of cylinders, in several different shades of red to purple. The interface unit attached to the side was a crude human intrusion, but necessary.
"What is that thing?"
"Temporal field node. Part of a star-drive. Isha'hassat technology."
"How did he get hold of it?"
"That's being looked into. There's quite a black market in alien tech, but this is new. The Isha'hassat are upset about it."
He picked up his PalmPC, linked in to the interface, brought up the programme.
Took a deep breath and hit go.
The rush of alien symbols across the screen was as expected - but surely that configuration was wrong? Alarmed, Kev reached a finger to the abort icon….
DISCONTINUITY
"So what happened?"
"He set up a self-perpetuating temporal loop."
Kev adjusted his position in the hammock, just enough to look round.
"Can we stop it?"
"No. The controls are inside the loop. No one from outside can reach them."
Beyond the shade cast by the trees, the beach was ablaze with sunlight.
"So how long does it last?"
"Twenty seconds. Twenty point two five to be accurate."
The glare from the white sand would have been painful if it hadn't been for his sunglasses. Even with them, the flicking pinpoints of light from the sea stabbed sharply into his retina.
"No – I meant how long will it last? The time-loop-field thing?"
"From his point of view, twenty seconds. From ours – eternity."
There was still ice in the bucket, though, and the drinks were cold.
Along the beach, he could see the girl coming back towards him. The bright orange bikini glowed against her tanned skin. She waved.
"But what happens if the sun explodes – or something like that?"
"If the sun explodes in five billion years, will that affect you?"
He'd promised her a special experience. She didn't know how special it would be. They would have the time of their lives. A long time. He waved back.
"No."
"And it won't affect him either. For the same reason. He's in a different time. Always."
Everything was perfect. Now was the moment.
Comments
Not bad. It does beg the question though: what does the..
Not bad. It does beg the question though: what does the time loop look like from the perception of the woman in the orange bikini? We know shes outside of it. We know he sees her waving in each loop, in perpetuity. What does she see at the end of twenty point two five seconds?
JUNK
JUNK
I guess its kind of good but I had to read it multiple..
I guess its kind of good but I had to read it multiple times to understand it. Also, more details please.
This is a really good idea. You just need to develop it a..
This is a really good idea. You just need to develop it a bit more. I shouldnt of had to reread it at all to understand the whole concept. I suggest added some more detail and.
I just wish it had more of a plot... it just seems like it..
I just wish it had more of a plot... it just seems like it is a matter of fact that one man is trapped in a time loop and two alien police officers are watching it and dont try to do anything about it. At the same time the simplicity is nice and very captivating. I appreciate the read!
What a very interesting story! I understood it on my first..
What a very interesting story! I understood it on my first read. Not confusing at all. Very good.
This story is most intriguing! I read it several times and..
This story is most intriguing! I read it several times and found it more fascinating with each reading.
At first glance, the man unwittingly caught in the perpetual time loop appears to be in a very pleasant situation. The sun is bright and warm, the drinks are still cold in the ice bucket, and the girl with whom he anticipates having thk
Chilling! Very Charlie Brookers Black Mirror"
Chilling! Very Charlie Brookers Black Mirror"
I loved the poetic justice as well, he was prepared to..
I loved the poetic justice as well, he was prepared to entrap her in the loop with him for selfish reasons, and he was clearly a creepy character so kind of got what he deserved,
What a very interesting story! I understood it on my first..
What a very interesting story! I understood it on my first read. Not confusing at all. Very good.
I like it
I like it
Well-written, but - to someone who read his first science..
Well-written, but - to someone who read his first science fiction story in 1951 - all too predictable. Been there - got the stickers.
I enjoyed the story and I thought it was very facinating..
I enjoyed the story and I thought it was very facinating but I found it a little hard to understand the first time but when youve read it aproximately 2 times it got a bit clearer, atleast for me. Anyways a good language and a story that makes you want to continue reading!
Very interesting concept. I liked the ability of the..
Very interesting concept. I liked the ability of the author to bring the reader through the loop while still developing other parts of the plot.
Very interesting concept. I liked the ability of the author to bring the reader through the loop while still developing other parts of the plot.
Very interesting concept. I liked the ability of the author to bring the reader through the loop while still developing other parts of the plot.
disliked
disliked
I wrote a similar story years ago, how do I put the story..
I wrote a similar story years ago, how do I put the story on the site?
I liked the concept and could see it being extended very..
I liked the concept and could see it being extended very well put
I was drawn in by the concept and then it was over! Could..
I was drawn in by the concept and then it was over! Could have used a bit more development. I hope the author is able to expense into an interesting novel at some point.
I loved it!
I loved it!
I like it
I like it
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