Return to Paradise

This story was good. I really didnt expect for it to be her husband sitting with her. This makes you realize that love is forever when you find that special someone. You always have your ups and downs but you always manage to get through it and start again. Losing her baby was a great pain and for him not being there caused a lot of hatred. This is probably what many women go through but its the mans job to understand and always be there.

The story was really good. It has a nice overall theme. I like the ending, it is very ironic, it ended just the way I wanted it to. You feel so much sorrow in the end for this woman, and want something good to happen for her. You didnt take any of you thoughts too far, they were perfect. It flowed very well, and was a pleasure to read.

Short Stories I read the short story called Return to Paradise, it was absolutly wonderful. This story had me fulled from the very beginning I could not believe at the end that the guy she was talking to was her husband, it just makes you feel good that they had worked it out and they could hopefully have a baby soon. I think that the author had the right idea with the way she mixed it up and made us readers believe she was talking to another man. It was great!

I believe the story was good but a little too sentimental. I like the way it was written because at first it sets the setting for you as you read the story; its very descriptive. It also gives the impression that she has met another male who she is connecting with but in reality is her husband. It also gives a happy ending which is always good in a story.

The story was pretty good. It was a little sad at the beginning and when her baby died. The story also kept me guessing, it looked like that her and James, was headed toward a divorce. The writer also couldnt have picked a better place for the story to unfold. The ending was great, I really enjoyed how her and James got together at the end. For the most part I like the story.

I think this story was pretty good. I liked how the ending was something that you would not expect. I liked how at the beginning you showed what the woman was feeling. I also liked how you described what she was feeling and thinking. I agree with everyone that the story was well written. The whole time I was reading it, I thought she had met another guy and she was there to get a divorce. I liked how the other guy was really talking about her husband. I think that was creative to do.

this history is truely beautiful since the divorce not have to be made in two people who also love themselves is very real since asi is the life. I enchant myself that they had married in the beach where they were known. in a very pretty history and I congratulate the author.I enchant this history and I hope that they continue writing. cr6669

Well I really liked the story it was very touching to read and it was really romance and I think it was a good romance story I would read this story again over and over until I would start cry my self to sleep and thats what I have to say about your story

What a weak romantic plot! I have to agree with previous comments stating that the story is both predictable and dry. The very title suggests the outcome of the story! Completely unrealistic and unimaginative. First of all, if the woman was seriously contemplating the end of her marriage to this man, so much to the point that the divorce was the very next day, she would not have been so quick to forgive and reconnect. In real life, communication and compromising yield successful marriages. This story misrepresents the values of marriage and sheds light on the fact that partnerships require hard work and dedication. More creativity and thought please!

I liked the story. I thought Lisa had found someone else to make her happy. I was upset that the man was her husband. He should have tried to get things straight before it went that far.

I had tears in my eyes as I finished reading this touching story!

I have to confess that i am not a big reader, but this story really intrestead me.I am writing an essay on a short story for my english class and this is the perfect story for me. Thank you. Angel E. Chicago, il.

oh come on, this was really predictable. Did no-one else knwo as soon as she said the man?? Her leaving him felt frivolous, which it shouldnt when she ahd lost her baby. Claire

Funny story

This story needs some meat on its bones. It seened like an outline or a roughly sketched idea for a future story. There wasnt enough character development for me to genuinely care if they got back together or not. Way too rushed.

I dont think it was very well written.The story line was fragile and instead of been taken aback with a sense of elation and surprise, the ending was plain and abrupt.The author did manage to create some lachymore towards the beginnig , but the story did not rise to the expectations in incited towards the start.

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Dont listen to all the know-it-alls, this is a great story.

This is a great story! To some extend it expresses how a woman feels after such a great lost; but more important is that it expresses how important it is to shares your feeling with the one you love, rather then keeping it inside.

yeah quite a nice piece of story.though its not really long but it still showed the strong bond of love between a couple.nice.great job! =)

: It’s a great piece. All long it had us thinking that the new man Lisa was talking to was a new person she had met or something. But at the end of the story it then revealed that it was actually her husband. It gets more and more interesting towards the end as there is a shocking twist at the end of the story. It is strange and requires a few readings to totally understand the story. Overall it’s great as its unique. It had us all thinking but it’s a great plot. Keep up the good work. -Jeh Ni and Wing Ki, Singapore, World, Universe

this... this story gave me a wow at the end. how sweet!!!

Beautiful. I think the man who doesnt weep at the ending has no soul. Well written. Kenk

A good story with very colourful imagery, only one obvious spelling mistake too-great work;)

anyone who has been in love with somebody, they thought was the one, can relate to this wonderfully crafted story. i just hope i get an equally happy ending! great story... stu

I enjoyed the way the story seem to just flow along carrying you with it. After reading the first paragraph it had me and I had to know the whys and the finish.

A very intersting story. It keeps you on your toes. I was surprised to find out that the stranger was James. Very good syle of writing.

it was fairly obvious that the man would turn out to be james, but i enjoyed the simplicity on the plot and the complexity of the emotions in such a short space.

I really liked the style of language the author used. I could imagine the idea of it as a great novel because three pages are just too short to make the characters appear believable. Thats probably why many readers considered it as cheesy... I miss more background and crucical topics of their conversation should be told more detailed... But all in all i enjoyed reading it. Nice story.

it is a good story, i dont think it was predictable at all.

Extremely predictable. BUT...still, I enjoyed it. Good work.

Very well written ... The end is superb - an appropriate Twist in the Tale - Prajakta Dixit

I think this story is really sweet, ans when you hear the end you think aaww there back toghther and they changed andbecame happ again and the setting was romantic. it was really good

THIS STORY WAS VERY TOUCHING AND I WISH IT COULD OF GONE ON JUST A LITTLE LONGER. LOVE ALWAYS PREVAILS :)

this story is great n is real touching.really.the part where i read that lisa lost her baby...i was...omigod.really.a really touching story i ever read.

I really enjoyed this story. I thought it was very cute and very sentimental. I had an idea that it would be James on the beach, just because I know how hard it is to let someone go. I thought you expressed it very well and I congradulate you on that.

I liked this story and believe it should be developed further. One of the comments asked for dialogue and I agree. Perhaps further development of why James agreed to divorce where they married? Need a reason for that, other than quick divorces.

very nice story, I liked it a lot!!! But it feels like it was a summary of a book, or another story, they should give more detailes of lisa and jamess life together!

I enjoyed the descriptive writing and the imagery used by the author. The final line of the story I found especially poignant. I agree with the other comments that suggested dialogue be added to enrich the characters. Dialogue could make us as readers care more about the outcome to befall these characters.

awesome story, love the twist at the end

this story is so much touch.

hi_this story was awesome.if you read this story you realize that love cannot be broken.

very very good story

wow! such a short and amazing story, so powerful yet so calm, which is a bit of a contradiction. its quality not quantity and somtimes you need to be remined of that.

i really like this story.

is the man stood watching lisa James? i dont really understand. Because English is my second language. is there any one could tell me. thanks a lot.

No one konws what is truth love,and ideal and reality are usually very different. So I think that we must energetic facing our life

Wow!Thats a really touching story.

I think Lisa wanna dissolve their marrage is a sort of unreasonable. She left all the thing just because her husband was working out of town when their child is lost. I think the logic is a little weird. Lisa should be more rational. That is not James wrong. But it is doesnt matter,because after all she made the right decision.

I think this story is very touching. I hope Lisa could found someone else to make her happiness. The author describe Lisa is very reality in the story. But I don’t believe James would be left her.