hmmm. Clockwork orange on acid!! Honestly I didnt understand it very well. The style is good and taut but couldnt get a handle on the actual story- probably my own fault.
Though somewhat entertaining, Rough Yogurt has nothing but conscienceless characters indifferent to their and everyone elses existence; consequently, this reader reserves indifference for this story.
- I didnt understand a thing the author was talking about. It sounded to me like he was just on a huge stoner trip the whole time he was writing it. The plot went in somewhat of a generic order, but the characters didnt have much development and the story overall was just bad. I did not care for this story at all.
I agree that this story was pretty confusing. I didnt get the yogurt part but I picked up on most of the story. I didnt like how it started because I did not have a clue about what was going on. It was kind of a boring story but I agree with the first comment, it is probably just me. Over all, this story should be for a person that is really into books.
Having viewed comments I am no longer worried of my command of English. Its just me, following two of my predecessors conclusions. And its certainly not the question of being a book mole neither. The text is just very much isolated, it wont communicate.
This story needs to be longer, because there is much more there. It’s obvious that the author has a clear idea of the events that transpired, but chooses to obscure them to show the reader how the character felt and thought after the events. Possibly making the main character smarter would help communication problems (if that’s a concern). But if the reader is smart he/she can figure out whats going on. The level of confusion perfectly fits with the character (as I see him and as he is now.) Its nice work, but it leaves me unsatisfied, because its just too short and I feel as though my brain got of its ass for no reason.
I actually liked your story. Everyone is
saying that it was too confusing, but I
feel like it portrays the thoughts of a
junkie well. It doesnt allow the reader
to really understand the situation or feel
for the character, but thats kind of how
an addict is. Good job :)
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hmmm. Clockwork orange on acid!! Honestly I didnt..
hmmm. Clockwork orange on acid!! Honestly I didnt understand it very well. The style is good and taut but couldnt get a handle on the actual story- probably my own fault.
Though somewhat entertaining, Rough Yogurt has nothing but..
Though somewhat entertaining, Rough Yogurt has nothing but conscienceless characters indifferent to their and everyone elses existence; consequently, this reader reserves indifference for this story.
nice story mate!!!
nice story mate!!!
- I didnt understand a thing the author was talking about. ..
- I didnt understand a thing the author was talking about. It sounded to me like he was just on a huge stoner trip the whole time he was writing it. The plot went in somewhat of a generic order, but the characters didnt have much development and the story overall was just bad. I did not care for this story at all.
I agree that this story was pretty confusing. I didnt get..
I agree that this story was pretty confusing. I didnt get the yogurt part but I picked up on most of the story. I didnt like how it started because I did not have a clue about what was going on. It was kind of a boring story but I agree with the first comment, it is probably just me. Over all, this story should be for a person that is really into books.
Having viewed comments I am no longer worried of my command..
Having viewed comments I am no longer worried of my command of English. Its just me, following two of my predecessors conclusions. And its certainly not the question of being a book mole neither. The text is just very much isolated, it wont communicate.
This story needs to be longer, because there is much more..
This story needs to be longer, because there is much more there. It’s obvious that the author has a clear idea of the events that transpired, but chooses to obscure them to show the reader how the character felt and thought after the events. Possibly making the main character smarter would help communication problems (if that’s a concern). But if the reader is smart he/she can figure out whats going on. The level of confusion perfectly fits with the character (as I see him and as he is now.) Its nice work, but it leaves me unsatisfied, because its just too short and I feel as though my brain got of its ass for no reason.
I liked it aswell but I also felt that it was confusing at..
I liked it aswell but I also felt that it was confusing at times.
But I think that the possitives over rule the negatives in this case so I was a story I enjoyed.
i liked it, gritty son
i liked it, gritty son
I actually liked your story. Everyone is saying that it..
I actually liked your story. Everyone is
saying that it was too confusing, but I
feel like it portrays the thoughts of a
junkie well. It doesnt allow the reader
to really understand the situation or feel
for the character, but thats kind of how
an addict is. Good job :)
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